Presentations Day#3

Presentations
"Should College Athletes be Paid" by Andrew, Francisco, and Ivan was over all a pretty good presentation, they touched on some important points of the issue in NCAA. Some positives that i like about their presentation is that they were all pretty knowledgable about their topic and kept really good composure throughout the presentation. Some negatives of the presentation, is that the the speaking between all of them was very disorganized, almost as if they were just jumping in randomly to talk at times. 

"Violent Video Games" by Pavel, David, and Forrest i feel like was a good topic choice for them. Some positivejs that I liked was that they had a lot of good lead arguments and at the same time came back with some really good rebuttals to them. They also used really good multi-modality throughout their presentation. Some negative that I disliked is that they were all pretty neutral about the subject and really just spoke on the subject itself the whole time and never really took a side. 

Group Project Reviews Day#2

“Hypocrisy is a Whore” The presentation about prostitution by Brian, Carlo, and Saul was not too good of a topic to me. They did make some good points, but with this topic being frowned upon so badly, there’s not many could things to say about the topic, and the bad things are already self-explanatory to most people.  In this life, everything revolves around money and I do understand that prostitution is these women’s solution but I think all of them can do a lot better than that. The main point of deciding what the difference is between treating your girlfriend out to dinner and buying her nice things and having sex with her later and prostitution is interesting, but we all have to admit; they are two whole different ideas. Over all, this presentation was pretty good, I think the speaking was divided equally and everyone knew what they were talking about.

 

“Space exploration” by Blake, Doyle, and Daniel was the most interesting topic of all so far. The project was done on a fascinating topic that had to have gotten everyone’s attention right out of the gate. I mean come one, who doesn’t think about the future and what it is going to be like 20 years or more from now with all of the new technologies being invented and so on. They used pretty good visuals in their presentation that helped keep everyone engaged. One thing I think they could have done better was divide the speaking time between each partner more equally. Daniel talked most of the time but after all he is a very good presenter but I think it could have been a lot better if everyone spoke at least nearly the same amount. Over all this was a very good topic and presentation.

 

“The Truth Behind Diets”- Irania, Jessica, and Randee was a very good topic because today in our society most people worry about their self-image more than anything. Even though a lot of the stuff they discussed was pretty self-explanatory, I loved the way they used an example of a famous singer who had problems with her body so she began to cut herself. That part stuck out to me the most because it shows that even famous or wealthy people go through the same problems as the average people do. To be honest this part got me more engaged with the topic. I also loved how they went over all the different types of eating disorders instead of the most cliché one, “overweight.” What I thought they could have done better is give some information on diets that are a solution to these problems and what food people should go for and what not to go for. 

Group Project Presentation

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Annotated Bibliography

Works Cited

1. O'Brien MD, Mary , Thomas McCoy MS, Scott Rhodes PhD, Ashley Wagoner BS, and Mark Wolfson PhD. "Caffeinated Cocktails: Energy Drink Consumption, High-risk Drinking, and Alcohol-related Consequences among College Students." Academic Emergency Medicine . 15.5 (May 2008): 453-460. Web. 10 Apr. 2014.

<http://onlinelibrary.wiley.com/doi/10.1111/j.1553-2712.2008.00085.x/full>.

2. In this article, the authors, researchers from the departments of emergency medicines, go over the influences of energy drink use, high-risk drinking behavior, and alcohol-related consequences. 3. The  authors and researchers used data from surveys taken by students at 10 universities in North Carolina to try to identify how many students are mixing there alcoholic beverages with energy drinks. 4. Their research focuses on how much the students are drinking and whether or not they have been through any harmful experiences in a certain amount of days in the past. 5. The information provided is very useful to the topic of alcohol and energy drink consumption. They focus almost completely on the topic of mixing alcohol and energy drinks instead of just alcohol.6. The study was limited to college students from a particular geographic area, and their ability to assess causal relationships,7. so therefore the authors express that there must be further research attempted to gain more of an understanding of the topic.8. This research is really effective because not a lot of college students know that mixing alcoholic beverages with energy drinks lessens subjective intoxication in those persons. Thus these students are doing this not knowing that they are physically hurting themselves more.

Santorini Greece Cave Pool "If I got a free ticket to go anywhere"

Response Paper #2

Finally the Lacma Lights

            This past spring break I finally got to do something I’ve been trying to do for the longest time. I got to go see the Lacma Lights, which are located at the entrance to the Los Angeles County Museum of Art. These lights were assemblage sculpted by Chris Burden in 2008. The Lacma Lights consist of 202 restored street lamps from the 1920’s and 1930’s and most of them once lit the streets of southern California. These cast iron street lights are of 17 styles, are painted a uniform grey color, and placed in a forest-like pattern. The lacma lights are also solar powered and are switched on at dusk.

            I have been trying to go see the Lacma lights for a few years now, but I just never found the time to do so. After seeing the movie “No Strings Attached,” I then realized I wanted to go visit this site because it looked so nice. So anyways, I drove home to LA with my girlfriend this spring break and we stayed at her sister’s house in Downtown Los Angeles. To be honest, I never knew exactly where the Lacma Ligthts were. Then one night over spring break we were on our way to Starbucks and I look over and see the Lacma Lights. I immediately pulled over to go over and see them. As we were trying to take pictures, it was hard to get a good shot with no one standing in the background because so many people go there every night. It is a tourist attraction so many tourist frequent this place literally all day.          

            While we were there we took lots and lots of pictures in many different funy poses and what not. We also took a lot of pictures for other people who wanted to have a family picture. I got to see many different ethnicities and many different smiles all having fun at this tourist site. I am planning on going back here every time I get to go back home to Los Angeles because its such a great environment and it’s a nice place to go and have a bite to eat maybe on a small date with someone special. If I were handed a free ticket to any place in the world, I would definitely go to Santorini Greece to go to a really nice cave pool. These cave pools are so beautiful and I bet anyone in the world, would want to experience being in a place like this.

Rhetorical Analysis

More Than a Game

Ja’Brian Blackwell

                                               English 1A M,W,F: 9am     

            For the 30^th year and running, the NFL has been the most popular sport of America. One of the biggest issues in the National Football League is the amount of injuries that are happening. Of course there is a wide variety of injuries but one in particular, concussions. These traumatic   brain injuries are caused by a jolt or blow to the head that can change how your brain works. To go along with my theme of football concussions, I decided to create an object that depicts how every traumatic incident you get contributes to the development of cognitive impairments and other negative outcomes.

            To show this, I chose to build a brain inside of a football helmet that showed how each impact to the head could break away at a part of your brain. The main object, which is the helmet, is actually a piñata that I found in target. My main idea was to get an old helmet from the equipment manager down at the football facility and then find a way to cut a wide hole in it somehow. Then as I was walking through target looking for materials I glanced over and saw this piñata in the shape of a football helmet, and thought to myself “this is perfect!”

            The size of this helmet is actually the normal size of a real life football helmet and is colored with grey and green confetti, which I found to be awesome because it is similar to CSUS colors. I formed the brain out of a dark shade of white air-dry clay with my hands. I placed a thick cardboard tube inside of the helmet and glued it to the bottom of the brain to hold it up. Next I stuck a long wood-piece vertically on top of the brain. Then I used about 8 smaller wood-pieces to glue horizontally to the vertical one. After that I tied strands of tooth floss to the 8 smaller wood-pieces, which will be hanging on to the deteriorated brain fragments from the blow to the head. The toothpicks were placed around the top of the helmet with red strips of paper on the tips of them to indicate that there was an impact that caused the brain to break apart.

            The audience my object is intended for is anyone or parents who have children who are interested in the sport of football. For football players, there is a 75% chance for concussion in every season. That is a very high percentage and I feel that people should be aware of this when they are deciding to play this sport. The message that the object I created conveys how serious a concussion is in the sport of football, but at the same time I hope to convey how much passion a lot of athletes have for their sport. I feel that my object is very effective because it is very specific in explaining the side effects of concussions. For instance, it may cause concentration problems, or memory complaints, sensitivity to light, hard to sleep, disorders of taste and smell etc. I love the sport of football with a passion and honestly don’t think I could live without it. To me and I’m sure most other football athletes, the sport of football isn’t just a sport, it is more than a game. So I don’t feel like my object is scaring my audience away from football, it merely just lets them know exactly what they are risking what they are getting into by participating in the sport.

            My 3-D genre relates to the other 3 texts that I chose for my previous genre analysis assignment in many ways. They all tie in to the main point of concussion through blows to the head through helmet to helmet hits. There have been many reports to stop the use of helmets or completely ban the sport of football due to so many concussion injuries and the effects they were having on the athletes’ lives. Boot states in his article “Let's not overreact to a handful of tragic injuries and legislate or litigate away a game that means so much to so many Americans.”

            In NFL super star Jamichael Finely’s personal interview about the concussion he received from taking a helmet to helmet hit from a safety. He then talks about when he finally came back to his senses, the conversation he had with his five year old son. “Daddy can you fly out and come home, I don’t want you to play football anymore.”(Finely Jamichael. Personal Interview. 28 Oct. 2013) This explains the effects concussions have on not only the athletes themselves but on their families. Because Finely loves the sport so much, despite the fact that he had this life changing experience he continues to live his dream in the NFL.

            The photographic text that I chose, ties into all the other texts because it depicts another NFL star getting his head smashed between two other professional athletes on game day. This image is really effective because it looks really painful and doesn’t look like he got up by himself after taking that. I have actually been concussed the same exact way depicted in the image here at CSUS. It was my first concussion I have ever received and I hope to never experience it again.

            At first, after drawing up my object I didn’t think the outcome was going to turn out too good. That is because I was going to use a real football helmet and try to figure out a way to cut it open, which I don’t think I would have. But fortunately I was walking through target looking for materials and looked over and saw a piñata in the shape of a football helmet. From then on, I knew this object was going to turn out great. I did have a few challenges in creating this object. The first challenge I had was cutting a perfect square at the top of the piñata helmet. Because I didn’t have a box cutter, which would have made it a thousand times easier, I had to use the normal house-hold knife. I did not feel too safe cutting this difficult object with a house-hold knife but fortunately I pulled through. The second and last challenge I had was forming the air-dry clay into a brain as best as I could. Trying to hold the clay in one hand and forming it with the other was difficult because as you were holding it with one hand, the clay was so soft that one side of the brain would kind of get squeezed together and end up smaller and deformed.

            The grade that I feel I deserve on this assignment is a B+. I feel I deserved this grade because I honestly found a way to complete this assignment in the short time that we had, and my time being even shorter trying to balance the most busy week of this semester that included spring ball with the team, and all the team meetings; and also all of my other classwork including my coms 4 speech that I had to prepare for, for Wednesday. I believe that the quality of my project is really good, and I am very happy with the outcome of it. I had a lot of fun with this assignment and I am happy we were assigned it.

Peer Review: Brett Babigian

The message being portrayed in Brett’s object is that media as a whole is what pretty much helps kids make there decisions on what they want to order at fast food restaurants. His 3-D object design was a hand made television, and on the screen depicts a type of swirl that goes around the screen with a toy spider in the middle. I believe that this object conveys the fact that these fast food commercials are brainwashing the kids into choosing these certain meals because as a child, who doesn’t want a meal that comes with a cool toy in the box. This object is intended for younger kids who are still attracted by toys. This object remind me of when I was younger, when the McDonalds commercial would come on and I would see the happy meal come out with the new Pokémon toys; I used to beg my mother to take me to McDonalds not because I was hungry but just so I can get the toy I wanted. 

Peer Review Prep RA

Description:

To go along with my theme of football concussions, I decided to create an object that depicts how every traumatic incident you get contributes to the development of cognitive impairments and other negative outcomes. To show this, I chose to build a brain inside of a football helmet that showed how each impact to the head could break away at a part of your brain. With an iron rod stuck through the brain, I glued two popsicle sticks to the top of the rod to hang the deteriorated parts of the brain using tooth floss. To attach the tooth floss to the popsicle sticks I hole punch 4 holes in each of the sticks and tight four strands of floss to them. The toothpicks were placed around the top of the helmet with red strips of paper on the tips of them; to indicate that there was an impact that caused the brain break apart.

Materials:

·      Popsicle sticks

·      Iron rod

·      Football helmet

·      Pink Play-doh

·      Tooth floss

·      Hole puncher

·      Red paper strips

·      Toothpicks