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“Shitty First Drafts”

       In the essay “Shity First Drafts”, Anne Lamott depicts the process of writing first drafts. She talks about the several steps she goes through to come up with her final published works. First Lamott speaks on what she believes in, and gives a short description of her thoughts and personal life. She then moves on to what I believe is her thesis and is set to begin her “shitty” first drafts. She starts off with what she calls a “child’s draft” which is her first five pages that consists mainly of brainstorming. With the thought in mind that no one is going to see this “child’s draft”, she gives herself the ability to write whatever comes to mind. As a writer, she has the fear of someone getting a hold of this first draft before she is able to revise. Lamott gives a really good visual of her process, stating that at first it would simply be just typing and making her fingers move. Then after crossing out lines and phrases that she could do without, she would begin a second draft.

SWA Genre Analysis

Academic text: In Defense of Football

Is Part Of: The Wall Street Journal, 2013

Author: Max Boot

In this article, Max Boot speaks about how athletes at the college and professional level, along with pop warner and high school continue to be agitated by reports that football is too dangerous to approve of. Many law suits and complaints have been filed for deaths by overheating or other freak accidents. But the main criticism focuses on the impact of repeated hits to the head. Even the hits that don’t result in concussions sometimes result in brain disorders that cause mood disorders and dementia.

 

Photographic Text:

In this image, it displays a professional athlete that played for the Titans getting his head smashed in between two other athletes running at full speed aiming to take him down. This is one of many ways that professional athletes receive concussions. This athlete in particular, most likely did not get right back up from this collision. The men at the professional level are extremely fit and extremely fast. Therefore concussions are the most common and most serious injury in the NFL.

Youtube text: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Gq2Lfwg4Als

This footage captured the event on what happened to Jermichael Finely after being hit helmet to helmet during the game against the Bengals. It demonstrates how after taking a hit helmet to helmet in the sport of football can quickly take a turn on your body. Jermicahel Finely in this video speaks about how after taking the hit, he tried running to the sideline, but when he looked up all he saw was jersey’s and pants, but everyone had no head or legs. He also stated that his whole body had some type of burning sensation.  

 

Short Writing Assignment #3 “Straub”

     In the article “Responding-Really Responding-to Other Students’ Writing” by Richard Straub, he gives the reader guidance on how to better their evaluation method when looking over someone else’s paper. Straub writes on how the reader should handle an appropriate revision by telling them where to put comments, how much to evaluate, and what tone should be used when giving feedback. He also writes that the reader should not only point out areas where the writer lacks and needs improvement but point out what you like about certain parts of the work. Straub states that the reader should not be afraid to critic a piece of work harshly, because we as peer editors are simply doing so to help the writer get better. He makes it really clear that in order to really communicate comments to a writer is to make them specific and clear. Really responding to other students writing will make you a better writer because it forces you to automatically peer review your own writing as your working on it.

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